One way to instantly hook your reader’s interest in your story is to introduce your main character to them and to make them care for that character. The result – your reader will immediately feel involved in your story:
“Please. No…” Hannah looked at the big, balding man, her lower lip trembling. An adult would have known she wouldn’t make it to the stairs in time. She knew really but still she tried, the scream catching in her throat as hands grabbed her.
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Oh ESther, that paragraph is too awful. It does make its point.
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Thank you, Robbie 🙂
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Yes, I have to like someone, preferably the main character, just watched a drama called Gold Digger, I didn’t like anyone haha. Actually going to start editing Mr Khan this week and reading some of those short stories in ‘When Stars Will Shine’ has been great for the creative mind 😉
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I’ve recorded that and plan to give it a watch! Good luck with the editing. How exciting! Glad you’ve enjoyed When Stars Will Shine 😃
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